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I donít think you were ever mine
but I guess Iíve lost you now
What we had was sweet and fine
Without a spoken vow
And you said you loved me
And my poetry made you cry
Now I donít think Iíll ever see
Just where you went or why
I suppose Iíll never hear
What you meant to say
But you wonít see me shed a tear
Cuz you arenít looking anyway
Itís just the same old song
I offered up my soul
You never cared, though, I was wrong
Your indifference took itís toll
Iíve lost you, youíve lost me
Except I donít think you care
And perhaps youíll never see
That I was ever there.

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The following comments are for "Invisible"
by nimue_the_mighty

Nimue who? I yeah, I remember...
Dismissed. That's how it feels. You've been dismissed by someone you loved. It hurts like crazy, but they don't care, because "you take everything so personally", or something else equally condescending. My favorite lines in the poem were

But you wonít see me shed a tear
Cuz you arenít looking anyway

I think you've done a great job here. It's a simple, straightforward poem expressing thoughts on a simple straightforward subject, rejection. Ouch!

( Posted by: Cyn [Member] On: September 29, 2004 )

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