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This one is in the hopes that my friends shopping
quest for a pigeon deterrent was successful.

Frikkin' rats with wings.
I'll show you a thing or two,
With my plastic owl.

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Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.


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The following comments are for "Raptor"
by metrozol

Bird Doo Doo
This Haiku was funny...not to the people who are plagued with loads of them...does that plastic owl really work....I'm still angry with the one that doo dooed on my head when I was downtown shopping...good work...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: September 29, 2004 )

HOOT,HOOT,HOOTers
Claire,you can release the conflict in your brain,
no pigeons can be harmed during the deterrent process.The carnivorous owl,whether real or plastic,is only meant to SCARE the pigeons away,
unlike the four-pronged spikes which are intent-
ionally meant to injure their feet.There now,you can cackle evilly away.Penelope,I KNOW you apprec-
iated it in a special way,heh-heh-heh.Nitzy,yeah,
they work.The more realistic looking ones might cost a bit more,though.I'm so-o-o happy you all got a kick out of it.

( Posted by: metrozol [Member] On: September 30, 2004 )

Minor note
I forgot to note this a hwile ago. I've learned that a haiku should follow a concept of each line being a statement. The three elements: the set up, the attribution and the delivery.

I've also seen this formula:

Title(which gives a hint, or explains)
description or introduction
description of action
summary, noun and verb

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 19, 2004 )





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