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Author's Note:
A neohaiku: 5-7-5 WORDS

Bach Cello Suite Number One
Varnished spruce guards her silky elegance
I smell Ysatis and know.

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by Teflon

scent of a woman
Have you been there? No, of course not. But couldn't be otherwise. Nothing is more fited with Ysatis than Bach Cello Suite Number One and Varnished spruce.

haute couture
so elegant wearing nothing
but Hot Couture

warm regards,


( Posted by: inmost [Member] On: September 29, 2004 )

Thank Heavens for Women
They put on the finest of perfumes --They create disarming melodies--They exquisitify our life-They read Teflon's poetry like an Entennman's chocolate chip cookies!!!

Claire, Eugenia -- give me some more time --I am working on perfecting the neohaikus' chocolate chip flavor.

Have a great weekend,


( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: September 30, 2004 )

Penelope -Alternative
You are 100% right in your perception of the situation, but it is, after all, a woman's perception.

I offer a situation that is more likely to come from the world of man's sentimentalities:

maybe the man that comes to the philharmonic sees the cello-playing woman, recognizes her, admires her, her elegance, her arduous moves as she produces melody, and grins, for he alone knows the sheer energy of the woman who a day ago decorated his life, and now he recognizes her distinct perfume, remembering seeing it on her dresser.
Soemthing like that.

To address your comment, I'd say it is great to see a virtuous woman that is pretty, that is well-groomed, that looks elegant, and smells of a faint and fine fragrance.


( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 3, 2004 )

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