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Hes the king on the hill,
In the Jesus Christ pose,
Watching over Brazil,
Why - no one ever knows.

Hes gazing down - below
Sweaty whores of Rio squirm,
Carnival colors flow
As one with gushing sperm.

Thieves kidnap, rape and kill,
Plagues blossom, street crime grows -
His arms proud, sham and shrill
In the Jesus Christ pose.



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The following comments are for "Jesus Christ Pose"
by Teflon

Jesus Christ Pose
Nice write Teflon. So colorfully done.

Thanks,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: September 25, 2004 )

Nuts and tickets
This is a nice poem about the man onthe hill. It got to me t last. Where does that nut-thing come from, FP? Here's my Brazil thing; toilet paper. And people throwing it in their neighbours garden. By the way, nice ads here. I'll book right away! (How much did they pay you, tef?)

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: September 26, 2004 )

Full...
...marks from me, friend. Maybe it's just me, but I found a lot of depth hiding under that vulgarity (it's like having your cake AND eating it, too). Good stuff. Carry on, then.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: September 27, 2004 )





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