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Madly in lust with shifts in phase
And mourn the nights that burned for days
I lie in limbo
Under sharklight
Let 'em think
This swirling drone I drown in
Grants me eyeballs in my limbs
They whisper "Stay away from THAT one"
It's cuz I yawn REAL FAST
With my eyes WIDE OPEN
And draw bizarre analogies
On wet spot cocktail napkins
"'Ey lady,wanna cocktail?"
Well I was born to follow crashcarts
Synthesize boy,synthesize
Over miles of cursive circuits
And give 'em your best pokerface
Later on we'll crack up,you and me
I'm dying inside,really
And my sides are splitting,
Building character

Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.

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The following comments are for "Mad I tell you,MAD,MAD,MAD!"
by metrozol

I too enjoyed this piece very much...
puts me in mind of myself...."dying inside, really
and my sides are splitting,
Building character
and finally your closer it love it love it....mad mad mad
I too am looking forward to reading mmmmuuuuwwwwaaaahhhhh

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: September 25, 2004 )

eat it raw!
Jessicanm,congrats on your new position.Your input
is appreciated.It took me several minutes to come
up with a title-more often than not you have to see the finished work before it whispers its name
to you."Ey lady,wanna cocktail?" was a struggle for me and yes,I can see where it seems out of place.I have a habit of getting on a roll some-
times to the point of feeling the need to toss a
fly into my soup to break up what I perceive to be monotony in my own creative process,hence the
potentially offending line. It's all meant in good fun,though.Some things are best eaten raw!
Claire...let me entertain you!I love your input
and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

( Posted by: metrozol [Member] On: September 28, 2004 )

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