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I see nothing,
For I wish to see naught,
Yet I am curious,
And that had always been my doom.

There he is,
I do not need to gaze far
The ususal distance,
He is coming nearer.

It is the twilight,
But it did not matter,
I had seen him at mid-light also,
At a different place.

I was not atop a high white wall then,
Nor attired as a soldier for my lord,
There were no shadows of the East,
That thundered and rolled.

Deathly afraid,
I knew I would have no choice,
Yet he is already here,
Uncomfortably close.

Dressed in mitigating black,
A pale hand, a pale face,
A sardonic smile, proud grim eyes,
The Dark Lord has come! I cry.

-another tribute to Dr. R

The conscious shape reality.

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by Furius

well done
You have a gift i think. i can picture and feel this, as i said before keep writing.
-P.B. Hedwig

( Posted by: P.B. Hedwig [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

Hi and well done
Hi...very well done. I enjoyed this very much. I would like to thank you for reading my story "The Secret" and your kind comments and nice rating. To answer your questions....Yes, it is true and it did happen. There were not people around as I was taking a short cut under the bleachers, which were enclosed. Haven't taken that route since. Sorry it took so long to get back to you, but the software running this site seems not to like my computer. chris is hoping to find me a solution. Thanks again, Trish.

( Posted by: Miss_Matrix [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

The Dark Lord
This was creepy and wonderful.

I have several images going through my mind and I have come back to re-read it 3 times now.

The last line of the first stanza somehow strikes me as being a bit too long in comparison with the rest of the poem.

I enjoyed your use of negative description to achieve imagary.

( Posted by: Zebralicious [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

Hmm, well now
I would love to give you a rating, though I'm sure it would be without justification as I'm more of a rhymer than a free verse poet. Wonderful imagery. Use of color. Can I suggest a bit more rhythm in your poetry without sounding too crass? I hope so. Keep banging em out. We need more of your kind.

( Posted by: praxidikai [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

I don't know who Dr. R is but your description is enough to let me know I do not want to know. Again I am feeling a spiritual undertoe to your work. Well written.

( Posted by: kat [Member] On: April 19, 2002 )

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