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i lost my ice cube
in the sand
how ridiculous
the old pipe-smoker
with glass bones
i saw him walking
i saw him walking
he use to paint me
wearing the red dress
incredibly french dress
of Satine
easy easy
he told me the secret
of jasmine scented candles
on the mystic sand

then he leaves me
with the ice cube
spinning around me




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by inmost

melting
puzzling to say the least, I'm still trying to figure out why he gave you the icecube, did it signify that all life melts slowly and returns to sand, ahhhh, sometimes we get lucky, nicely done...Bob

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 23, 2004 )

bob, lilia, jessica...thanks
Thanks everyone for spending some time on my lines.

Bob, to be honest I'm still wondering if HE gave me the ice cube or the ice was there anyway and he gave only a sign about it...

Lilia, hope you are not disappointed. Actually I dont't know who Ice Cube is/was...

Jessica, I already read some of verve's piece thanks to your recommendation. And I'm really impressed. I have to admit I'm in a abstract mood right now, maybe because I'm reading Boris Vian's "Foam of the Daze". I have more "abstract" poetry, unfortunately all of them are in romanian language which is my native language. If I'll write something new in english, lit.org will be the first who know that.

( Posted by: inmost [Member] On: September 25, 2004 )

Abstract into Abstract
Abstract in Romanian translated into abstract in English will a be well-preserved abstract! Ionesco proves that.

Why not translate it and use it as an epithet? It'll give you a jolt of creativity.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: September 26, 2004 )





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