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Sitting in class on a particularly nice day this came to me, the title is cheap but it will do.

spring
It's so beautiful out,
yet I can't see.
My heart tells me
to be happy,
yet i feel dread.
Everyone is happy,
why can't I be?
I want to shut off my mind,
don't want to think
about it anymore.
If you ask,
everything is fine,
or at least it will be.
Don't mind me though,
don't let me bother you.
You be happy,
who knows it might rub off.
Till then I'll blend in,
part of the scenary,
thats what I'll be.

-P.B. Hedwig

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Blackbird sing in the dead of night. Take these broken wings and learn to fly.All your life.
-john lennon and Paul McCartney


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The following comments are for "Spring"
by P.B. Hedwig

don't worry, you are not alone
I also feel dreadful. Spring only mean only one thing to me: tests and more tests, small tests, big tests

Nice poem but I thought the beginning of each of line has to be capitalized especially if they are aligned this way. It goes around in a lovely way in my head. It's not a conventional spring poem but that is a good thing.

Slightly ironic isn't it?

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

furious,
Thanks for your comment, i know the feeling of tests tests and more tests. I don't capatalize each line because they are sentances that are broken up at what i feel appropiate times.Although i have to admit that i just started punction and capitalizing my poems since i have been posting here. When they were just for me i did it in my head and never did it on "paper". But again thanks for the comment.

( Posted by: P.B. Hedwig [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

P.B. Hedwiq
I felt in tune with this poem. I feel the same many times, though it's not about tests. Women are vile, I shall say that forever more. Good poem, liked it a lot.

-MJ

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

Hey now
Well, I dont specifically share my collegue Mj's hatred for the female gender, I know the feeling of glory days lost to uncontrollable loss of appetite. Fine poem, nice flow and thank you deeply for your kind words regarding one of my poems. I am no shakespeare, but I'm honored at the comparison.

( Posted by: praxidikai [Member] On: April 17, 2002 )

re:women
I think that this poem was not about any gender or aything of that nature. I doubt Hedwig was writing about how vile women are; if memory serves, she is one. I think this is more along the lines of how we feel theneed to not burden the ones we love with our problems, so we put on this happy face, hopng eventually we will be happy ourselves (You be happy, who knows it might rub off.) That's just my take on it, thogh. We get wrapped up in our little worries, but we keep it to ourselves so as not to burdedn those we care about.

( Posted by: E.G. Evans [Member] On: May 6, 2002 )

re:women
I think that this poem was not about any gender or aything of that nature. I doubt Hedwig was writing about how vile women are; if memory serves, she is one. I think this is more along the lines of how we feel the need to not burden the ones we love with our problems, so we put on this happy face, hoping eventually we will be happy ourselves (You be happy, who knows it might rub off.) That's just my take on it, though. We get wrapped up in our little worries, but we keep it to ourselves so as not to burden those we care about.

( Posted by: E.G. Evans [Member] On: May 6, 2002 )





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