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Chorus

And I can't believe it,
What I nearly did,
And I can't take it,
Who I nearly killed.

And I don't believe myself,
I just never learn,
And I can't face it,
Why am I so numb?

Verse 1

I sit here staring,
The outside world a drone,
Privacy invaded,
Yet somehow alone.

I wonder what to say,
How to apologise.
I think of what I did,
Of what I didn't realise

[ Chorus ]

But now it's all over,
And the tears have tried.
Sooner or later,
The pain will subside.

[ Solo ]
[ Chorus ]

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This is my first post here :) Hope to get some [good] feedback :D


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The following comments are for "Alone With Reality"
by T

title, possibilities
Of what I didn't realise

maybe this line should be...the pain, I didn't realize....title suggestion "alone with reality, or rude awakenings" Hope to see more of your stuff, it's obvious you are talented...Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 19, 2004 )

Thanks
Thanks for the suggestions, If i figure out how I'll change the title to 'Alone with Reality'.

Thanks again! :D

( Posted by: T [Member] On: September 20, 2004 )





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