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Sometimes a picture cannot be
Reliable like printed words
Pinholes can't retain a mountain
Auroras or primative love

Cam'ras don't remember heartache
Echoing like a rippled sea
The passions of literati

Blindness Therisias better serves
Than stifled tongue in muted verse
Unseeing eyes see more than sight
Like darkness owned by not the night

Sometimes a picture isn't worth
A thousand words, nor even one
When shadow play replaces sun
But prose is best by melting wax

For students, like myself, this is iambic tetrameter with frequent trochaic substitution in the second stanza. There is also a discretionary extra syllable ending in the first line of the third stanza. I decided to end with imagery for maximal effect, and in so doing contrasted the third stanza. Study hard and enjoy :) If it's good let me know and I'll put it in my portfolio. Thanks. You guys are the best!


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The following comments are for "Sometimes a picture..."
by sixstrungout

Joe D
You need to add this to your portfolio, I especially liked:

"Cam'ras don't remember heartache"

This piece really got me thinking and is a great ode to the written word.

Best Wishes

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )

iambic what?
I have no clue as to what an iambic tetrameter is, but I do know this is an awesome piece no matter from what lens it is viewed from, thanks for sharing....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )





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