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By a stroke or wave
In ancient rhythms of war
Pan- consumatted.


This word or gesture
Sets complex simplicity
And the world is made


Perpetual struggal
Hackneyed without losing charm
Are kept well alive

The conscious shape reality.

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The following comments are for "Concerning Those Molders of Fate"
by Furius

The 2nd one :)
Of the three, I'd choose the second one. Just be careful of your spelling, as in something as pointed and simply put together as haiku, it does detract from the over all appeal.

Nice effort, well written, the fact that there are three different perspectives is a good thing, but as I said, I prefer the second one best.

Ju =*_*=

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: April 14, 2002 )

sorry about the spelling
I thought it looked wrong but failed to stop the posting in time by the time I realized which letter needed doubling

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: April 15, 2002 )

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