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Last night I had a

dream
that you were gone.
I dreamed that you
had taken everything
you owned.

I dreamed that you
were on a one way
flight,
and you had left me
here while I was

standing in tears
that I had cryed.

But when I woke
up you were still

standing in my hearts
way.

Every time I think that
my heart is over you,
I try to walk away
but your shadow won't
let me through.
I cant seem to feel a

thing but everything
you meant to me,
and I think I want
to die, than I some
how, find away
to drag my heart
to safety if only
for a day.
Now what in the world
am I going to do,
with everything you
left here of you,
there's not a trace
of anything,
that I can errase
everything you
did to me,
I went on hoping
and building,
you kept on tearing
down, now I think
that I can't stand
to stick around
but than again,
there still time
for one more day.

------
CoCo


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The following comments are for "There's still time for one more day"
by coco

COCO
Very sad lyric. Very sad title as well. The spaces between stanzas are more like a deep breath between sobs. I like its melancholy and I almost could hear the song play in my mind. Thanks.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )

maybe tomorrow
I went on hoping
and building,
you kept on tearing
down,

classic line, many times a loved one leaves and we get to the point in our own lives that we say what's the use, lets end end, but we fail to realize that tomorrow can and will be better, thank you for sending this message, hope to read you again, if not today, maybe tomorrow....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )





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