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The sunflower grows alone
Tired within the garden far from home
Never relying again on green thumb
Too long they've burned his buds
Neglected his love

His pedal's shake
From wind too strong
From scortching sun too come

Tonight it may rain
His service repaid
But sill no green thumb

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The following comments are for "The Sunflower"
by LizardKing

This is seriously lacking as far as poetry is concerned. Isn't there more to write about?

( Posted by: Staggerlee [Member] On: September 16, 2004 )

I gotta echo Staggers comments, there doesn't seem to be enough here.

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: September 16, 2004 )

The Sunflower
Try combining the last two stanzas so that they equal the number of lines in the first.

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: May 2, 2005 )

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