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star-filled August night
Blueberry Moonlight blankets
back yards are alive

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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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by peterpaulino

Pete/April?
I want to know what happens in April to make the yards come alive. Please tell. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

Huni
August, Huni. Families usually spread blankets and have picnics, watching the Blueberry Moon, which the light also blankets them. April has its own beauty, too. Thanks Huni.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )

Blueberries
Now, I know %^% all about haiku, so I'm not sure how this rates in comparison with other haikus. Nonetheless, what stands out here -- as in all of your other poems -- is your wonderful use of the English language. That line, "Blueberry Moonlight blankets," says more than most could have said in several paragraphs.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 18, 2004 )

YIPEEEEEE!
Thanks Viper and Claire! You don't know how much you made my day. :D :D :D

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 19, 2004 )

Pen
Big Big Thanks, Pen! Gosh,one of the haiku experts! :D

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 20, 2004 )

and at the opposite end
of the spectrum is the Haiku ignoranti like Viper and me. I liked the lines though Peter and thought they captured the mood well. cheers mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: September 21, 2004 )

Mick
Thank you very much for the thought. From time to time something sparks and gets me to write haiku. :D

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 21, 2004 )





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