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Burning off stubble
his wife brings morning tea
and news- a fire jump.

Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.

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The following comments are for "Stubble"
by Huni

You have the liveliest haikus Huni. I always loved them and always tried to imitate the excellence but failed.

(I miss you and am going to miss you even more, please ask nae)

Luv yah, Peter Paulino

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 22, 2004 )

Another good one
You really have a fine way with haiku - they always have genuine touch and authentic feeling.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: November 1, 2004 )

Peter I'm back ...
where are you? What do you mean? Thank you for saying such lovely things to me. I hope to catch up on all who stopped by while I was away. warmest to you Peter, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: November 30, 2004 )

gomar - long time no see ...
Good to hear from you again gomar. You describe yourself most likely. So good to have you comment. thanks, regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: November 30, 2004 )

away with words
thought i should see what's on the other side of huni's comments. appears you already have a following. i enjoy your work, not only because it suits my attention span, but because of the lyricism. I appreciate that it is often the shortest of works that require the most pre-thought, as each word becomes sacred in itself (what to include, what to leave out)
This is my favoite one of yours -- the whimsy and the ridiculous imagery resonate. I think you do a great job in the way you present your content. thank you.

( Posted by: brad [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

Brad - you're welcome
I hope to see more of your work. I like your sense of the ridiculous and I think you write well as well. You are right about re- thinking every word. I like to really craft a poem. After making copious and 'meaningful notes, I work for a long time making it fit for others to read (I hope!). As you said, even more so for Haiku. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 9, 2004 )

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