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I'm flipping through channels
On our television
I'm changing position
I'm peering at clocks
Looking at watches
I'm studying tables
I chew on a carrot
I call up the station

I'm waiting for you
You, you, you, you

I'm scratching my elbow
I'm happily anxious
I snap out of trances
I'm cleaning the kitchen
I put on a kettle
And order some indian
I get in the shower
I sing like a sheepdog

I'm waiting for you
you you you you

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The following comments are for "Waiting for you"
by shapeshifter

Lucie is ahead of me today and said it all. I'l just add I loved this especially the little things one does when waiting - putting on the kettle, cleaning the kitchen again, made it feel real. Sleeping like a sheep dog - excellent, one ear awake always. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

Very real, the madness that comes with waiting for someone (who's not sure to arrive) could be felt here. Very good.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

I liked the simplicity in this piece. You described the waiting pefectly, I have done all of those things in anticipation, trying to relax, trying to appear relaxed!

Good piece


( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

Okay, I'm just an idiot
I thought I read 'sleep like a sheep dog". Our work dogs didn't sing but they slept with a part of themselves alert and awake. Some thing bugged me so I came back. Arrgh.... (blushing here again!!) Bad assumption on my part. Sorry ss. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

shapesshifter waiting
real cool write.

( Posted by: DieBaronHobskewward [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

wow! thanks
Just wait until you hear the song! It's brimming with anticipation, anxiety, but a good-spirited one, the spine-chilling thrill, the mixture of ecstacy and imminent nervous breakdown, we all know it, because we have all been in love. And for those of you craving for social pornography; I'm not in love at the moment, I believe that's why I was able to write a bout it. Thank god I still remember what it feels like

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )

sing like a sheepdog may not be the best of metaphors, I meant any dog howling like at the moon, but I have no knowledge of whether this is sheepdog behaviour, but the word fell into my head, and pieces like this must be written very quickly and spontaneous, or they don't get written at all, not by me anyway

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: September 15, 2004 )

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