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I don't want your lips for talking
(shut up, lover, let me bruise
those two plump lines and take
that darkness from between them into me)
Or your eyes for reading mine
(shut them tight and I will show
you braille in flesh and afterglow)
I don't want your hands for fidgeting
(only melting here are shivers sending)
Don't be coy, now's not the time
for brilliant insight, genius thought
(or I'll give in to what I say I hate
cliche and repetition, I will loosedn
everything if only you come near
enough to spark)

------
"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"


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The following comments are for "Perfect as Strangers"
by hazelfaern

Lips
Yep, the lip line got me too! Good job!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Turn...
That flame up some more... Make that pan sizzle...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

oooooooo
There is definately something in the water of late, everyone is hornier than a virgin at a prison rodeo *Golden Girls* hehe, always wanted to say that!!

I really liked the clever way in which you wrote this poem, excpet I have a dirty mind and thought that he may ask if you wanted stretch marks in the corners of your mouth!! *ahem* Sorry.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Dirrty
Good poem, but the title made me think of Balki Bartokomous; highest of unintential comedy.

( Posted by: eleutheromaniac [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

My Gosh
You've surpassed yourself with this one Hazel, I'm duly impressed.

Proof that lust well-written isn't and needn't be filth.

I particularly liked, "Or your eyes for reading mine
(shut them tight and I will show
you braille in flesh and afterglow)"

Well done

May you never thirst

Bliss

( Posted by: Enforced Bliss [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Los Azules
I rarely have time to look at this site much.
Your style has changed though. You were always a philosopher and now, a lover?



_______________________________
Take a stand. F*** the man, yeah.
jon spencer

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Thanks All...
for such lovely praise. I was uncertain about posting this poem. I wrote it some monthes ago as a reaction to a comment written on Ark's Mannitoba Co-op piece and almost posted it then but chickened out as I was really unsure as to how close it toed the line to that red bold-faced type zone, erotica.... on the one hand I kept thinking "It's safer than Disney" but when I'd actually gotten it into the que, I'd quake a little and decide, "No, it's a lame letter to Penthouse." It's stuck in my head, though, and I finally got someone to read it and give me their opinion, someone who said, "Dork, it's just good, you should share it." Of course, the irony to this whole story is that the day this little piece finally posts the entry just beneath mine is entitled "Poetry Whores" (I loved your piece, btw, Lillia, as always) All of which simply goes to show you that any artist who is so timid to press upon their boundaries is fully deserving of such cosmic irony.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

Hazel...
Well after reding your response my comment above could not have made you feel better about posting this piece! Please forgive me if that is the case, I have a very eau de toilette sense of humour. I think sensual poetry can be a great form of writing, it is part of our lives as is anything else, and deserves attention.

A writer of your calibre need not worry.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )





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