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September Sighs

As the last
romantic drifts of warmth
loosen their fond hold, unhaunting
the geese cast pragmatic eyes upon
the brittle, weary grass and stretch
their hungry wings, undaunted

An amber spill
which will soon blaze
soft upon arborial aux revoirs
picks you out of the twilight
in my periphery as I turn
your gaze moves away with mine
synchronized like two
oscillating fans in unison
but I know
you were looking at me


------
"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"


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The following comments are for "September Sighs"
by hazelfaern

hazelfaern
We are just coming into spring here down under and so this poem is a nice promise for me, I love autumn. This is really lovely. I love the way you use words. They give a little thrill as I read, thank-you. regards huni. (and her cat Basil, who is almost sitting on the keys. Purrrrrrr.)

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

caught it Vorpal
as always...

I'm going to go out on a limb here... I think this is your best work, because of the slight departure from your normal style... it is still yours, your fingerprints are definately on it, but it isn't as heavy and dense with detail, metaphor, and symbolism as much of your other work... it comes off effortless and exquisitely beautiful...

top shelf stuff...

wishing he could find a glass...

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

September Sighs
Hazel, I love that colour, especially in eyes, mmmmmm *ahem*.

This was a great piece!! I love this time of year, it's sunny but not humid, yu can breathe and run about.

Your second stanze reminds me of a motorway over here called the M40. It runs from London to Oxford. There is a section on it which is lined with so many types of tree and shrub it's impossible to count. But everyone turns into a different shade of amber, gold, brown, red and oxblood imaginable, it's stunning.

Thank you for sharing this piece

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )

Nice
I really like this one. Especially the imagery of the geese. I have always liked the geese. I always felt they were speaking to me, seriously.

Buena nota desde mi :)

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )





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