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You say you can forgive me
For my midnight rendezvous.
I left to meet her many times,
When I should have been with you.

You say you can forgive me
For feeling how I do.
You said I'm only human
There was nothing I could do.

You say you can forgive me
Both have so much in common,
Your eyes, your hair, your caring ways
My feelings turned to wanton.

You say you can forgive me
But I see it in your eyes,
It's so very hard to trust me
After telling all those lies.

You say you can forgive me
Someday that might be true,
But first I must forgive myself
For the way I treated you.


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I by no means consider myself a writer, I just play one on the internet.


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The following comments are for "Forgive Me"
by snapshot

Jim/forgivness
This is already a better poem than the last. See, you are meant to write, yes? You make a good point in this one. Trust is not anything to do with you. It is a choice the other makes when ready, but at the same time, you now have to build up a record of being honest and offering a high level of reassurance. Not easy, but doable. Good-luck, and best wishes Jim. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

huni / lilia
Thank you both for taking the time to read and comment on my second poem. huni, you are 100% right.The decision is not mine alone, I regret what happened, but can't change it now. lilia,had the cigarette, and a glass of wine ;-).Again thank you both, this has been very therapeutic for myself and my wife.

( Posted by: Snapshot [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Snapshot
I think you are doing great with your poetry writing. It takes practise and it takes some time to develope skills. For just beginning I know you are headed on the right track. Pain is a good building foundation. Any emotion that gives you the necessary ink. Sometime it may be anger, laughter, guilt etc. This is a good place to share your writing. Yes writing is very therapeutic.....
My Best to you,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

windchime
Thank you so much for taking the time to read, and comment on my poems. Never in my life have I been one to not say what I was thinking, I guess the same applies here. I'm glad you like the poem.My wife did too ;-)

( Posted by: Snapshot [Member] On: September 17, 2004 )

Forgivness
Both parties suffer when something like that happens in a marriage...If my ex would have asked for forgivness...I would have given it ...and taken him back...and the subject never would have been brought up again...It does take time to trust again ...but true love will hang in there...Keep writing it helps the healing process...Please forgive yourself ...then you can start anew...

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: September 17, 2004 )

very snappy
Now how in the hell did I miss this, this is totally awesome, and speaks volumes in regards to infidelity, and the trust factor it involves afterwards. Many who have went through this should read, very good, and don't be so modest, you definitely belong here....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 19, 2004 )

Too kind
Bob,
You are too kind. Your comment, and rating are both very generous. Thank You for taking the time to read and comment.Maybe someday I could come up eith something a little less depressing.

( Posted by: Snapshot [Member] On: September 20, 2004 )

Snapshot of the Mind
Jim,

I have read all of your posts with interest as you have submitted them, and I had not realised I had never commented on any of them.

May I thank you for your comments on my work, they are appreciated and make writing worthwhile. I love to see poetry written from the heart and find that this is indeed your style and apparently ypur motivation for writing.

Because I enjoy this so much, I normally just read and move on, in order not to critise or deter the author fromthis personal type of work. Your range of style is much wider than mine, but amazingly I find your rhyming poetry is in the style I normally write in.

If it is any help, I write spontaniously, but then revisit my work to ensure that the meter is Ok then edit it acordingly. The only way I have found to check this is to read it out aloud to myself to ensure I do not stumble over any awkward words or where my rhyrm goes adrift.

This also allows me to 'hear' my own words and see whether I agree with them or not... it helps in the healing or learning process and was a method I used to use for revision , oh so many years ago.

Excuse me if you think I am rambling, but this is the easiest way I know to improve and take full benefit from your work.

Again thank you once again for sharing your poetry and feelings with us,

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

Ivor rambling????????
Not hardly. Thank you for taking the time. I am truly honored. I could only hope to someday write like you, and many others here at Lit. I only recently started writing things down, for reasons that are pretty plain to see. The therapy has been wonderful, and the writing has been rewarding. Again Thank You for your comments.
Jim

( Posted by: Snapshot [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

Forgive Me
Snapshot, this poem is outstanding! My heart goes out to you and your wife. I hope everything will work out. I know marriage can be very difficult.
You seem to be on the road to recovery. Great write!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 11, 2004 )

Nae.........................
Thank you so much for taking the time. Things are pretty good most of the time, now. As you can probably tell, she is quite a woman.Most of the problems now are because I don't always feel I deserve her.

( Posted by: Snapshot [Member] On: October 11, 2004 )





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