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I

Iíve dreamt again, of beetles, of mouths
filled with dark earth and I wake, startled,
to the sound of rain falling on stones.
A thought whispers itself in my ear,

'Even stone wears away
under the delicate force of tears'...

On the window, I see your fingerprints,
smudges on cold glass.
Many times, my hand has risen
to wipe them away, yet always stops
midair,
as if stilled by the fear
that this simple act could erase you
from my heart.

You taught me love,
yet without you, life
becomes a useless skill.


II

I swear I can taste you on my tongue,
(so like rain, earthy and green)
and I feel you linger, breathing
the soft sighs of the dead in my ear.
Hidden in echoes, comforting footsteps
trail me from here
to there;

this empty room is filled with you,
even as I am filled with sorrows.
Iíve tried, again and again, to write
of you-- deep, aching words that weep
from my pen, love letters to gentle shadows...

"Beloved,
I am pale rain and grieving air--
fragile petals that fall
across the lips of a mournful ghost,
and only love remains"--

but they are merely ink
on ordinary paper, voiceless
and bleak.


III

Something loves and torments us...
refusing to let go.
How many times has the moon
waxed and waned-- how many times
has the wisteria flowered
since Iíve shut us both away?

Love lives wherever.

You and I
are meant for different places, now.

Papers shift and flutter to the floor
on your soundless breeze.

We must let the dead move on.




------
"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL


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The following comments are for "What Remains"
by Serenem

Melinda/what remains
This is so desperately lovely. It hurt to read it, yet the pleasure in your words was as usual uplifting. Thank-you for sharing such a beautiful poem with us. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Thank you Serenem...
for sharing such heart wrenching artistry with us once again. You are so gifted

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Absolutely Beautiful
This left me speechless. It was so personal and detailed and real. There was a haunting feel that floored me. Not in the ghostly sense, but that the voice was so bereft. I really enjoyed this poem.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Melinda
Melinda,

Your poetry speaks for your heart. I would like to comment only on the last line.

'We must let the dead move on'

This statement accepts the dead as 'living persons' on whom we can have influence. How right you are. But I would also say, sometimes we must let the living move on also, including ourselves.

The natural way you stress that a link exist between the living and the dead is refreshing to me. Everybody develops and follows the path they choose, whether in this life or the next. Soulmates may not want to 'move on', but still influence your feelings and actions, giving heartfelt support where neccessary.

I am sorry if I sound positive about my statements, I am, but everyone will eventually find their own truth.

With the excellence of your words you are helping others.

'this empty room is filled with you,
even as I am filled with sorrows.
Iíve tried, again and again, to write
of you-- deep, aching words that weep
from my pen, love letters to gentle shadows...'

I have been there, and wept all the way through the words I wrote down..... your words serve as a reminder that a 'bond' continues past the grave.

Thank you,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

What remains is gratitude
for all your very kind comments on this poem. I'm overwhelmed by the praise and some what unsure of being worthy of it... but thank you for the bottom of my heart, none the less.


Huni, thank you for your thoughts-- I'm still reeling over 'Spring Writes'!

CJ, I'm so impressed by your work-- thank you for your kindness regarding mine!

Lilia, thank you for reading and I'm glad that you found worth in this.

Lucie, dear lady... Poet? I'm trying. Not sure I'm quite there yet, however, but thank you for saying. Comming from you, it's a high compliment, indeed!

BMartinez, Thank you for your comment; I'm so glad that you liked this poem.

Ivor, I can deeply feel your own personal experience with this. I believe in this wholeheartedly. The thing is, the ones who 'stay behind' sometimes cling to the dead so strongly that they shut themselves away and become 'dead' themselves. I believe that those who pass do not want this; they want their loved ones to live their earthly life to the fullest. There comes a time for them to let go, to move on to their rightful... realms. This does not mean that we must cut all ties; that we must forget... just that 'we are meant for different places now'.

Thank you for your wise and thoughtful words, Ivor.

Thank you all for continuing to be so supportive and kind.


With warm regards,

Melinda



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

this made me find an avatar

Very Emily Dickinson to me.
I thought of her cat poetry, and of your cat haikus - which I am waiting for - this pic looked like a great avatar for you. Just a thought:



( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: September 20, 2004 )

What Remains
Melinda, this is so incredibly beautiful! I am so happy I followed comments here. Bravo, dear friend, a standing ovation.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 20, 2004 )





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