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I try to write of you,
placing with infinite care,
these words, but they flail
like the wings of dark birds
beating against the edges of the page.
Caught on paper,
the life in them dies;
they fade to the pale color of rain,
and pool at my feet...

How many times has the moon
become new since you left?
I have yet to lose count.
Your absence remains by my side,
a silence within silence,
this thing of solid heft and pain,
mute as an egg of stone.

What I want is to write you down,
to feel you under my fingers,
but I canít moan or gasp
or wail on paper;
I canít, with my words, make it real,
make it breathe... I canít

make it you.


We speak to remember,
but I am still without voice.
I am left with writing,
with caging doomed birds
on this ordinary paper,
ritual sacrifices performed
in an attempt to bring you back.

Filled with sorrows,
I am frightened...
I try to remember your face,
but all I can see
is this damned room full of rain.







.
MKL

------
"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL


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The following comments are for "A Room Full of Rain"
by Serenem

Ah! Melinda
How wonderful is this. Just heaven to read and the right amount of heart pain. truly good. I was going to tell you the best bits for me - but it is the whole poem. warm regards huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Raining, huni


Thank you so much, Huni!


~smile~



Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

:)
capturing the feelings of longing and emptiness must be your gift, as this is such a wonderful present to us. Thank you, very well done....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

lilia


Thank you, lady of the lovely name!


~Laughing~


I so appreciate your comments!


Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

chapter1


I am honored to recieve a ten from you, truly...

Thank you very much!

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

rainroom
very nice poem,Melinda.

Alex/Charlie...lol

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Willhill


I'm so sorry! I know your name, really...



stupid melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Funny Melinda
You can call me anything but Sue or late for dinner.lol. It really is a nice poem, I mean it.

totally amused charlie.......

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Melinda
This was beautiful, I found myself floating along with your words.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

A Room Full Of Rain
Melinda,

This got under my skin, It has crawled in and I doubt it will exit anytime soon. I hear you girl, WOW, I love this!!!!!!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

melinda.....
this piece is poetry at its essence.....i flowed along with it word by word...
sigh....to be genius at your craft...you are truly blessed.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )

Alex
Thank you kindly, sir! I'm so pleased that you liked this!

Regards,

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Nae, I'm thrilled
that you like this and so glad that you stopped by to read and leave your thoughts. I appreciate them so much!

Regards,

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Claire
It's great to know that you liked this! I'm honored that you stopped to read and comment!

With respect,

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

CJ, you make me smile


...a genius? Not hardly! However, I do feel blessed... in many ways, not the least of which is to be in the company of a great group of people on this site and a fine poet such as you.

Thank you for your gracious words!

Regards to you,

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

My friend...
oh where art thoe have you been hiding? I hope that all is well in your circle of life. It has been awhile since you have posted and your presence is surely missed.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )





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