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Sitting at my old desk
trying hard to reveal the dark
to pull it up, drag it out
and beat it into verbs and verse.

Languor of mind overwhelms me
my hand lays still
and I have become a dilettante
in the ways of angst.


How do I drain the cup of misery
when I feel this season all-around
blanketing old aches
with honey scents and petals.

Iím sure Dante didnít have to suffer the ways of
plum blossoms gently blessing the rock rose
or the hellebore glowing softly at him
from beneath the red camellia tree.

Or did the likes of Wolfe
have to watch the bees nudge
the voluptuous french lavender
while penning pain and fury.

Even the ducks on the pond
cause no ripple on the surface
and that stillness
becomes an effigy of me.

Honey eaters in the water jar
send shivery sparkles of silver in the air
while the young willow
shades the old cat snoring on the steps.

Cootamundra wattle diminishes the sun
turning the sky a startling shade of blue
And through tall windows, like a whispered chant
comes a eucalyptus scented breeze

I feel a sweetness rise in me
exciting love and swamping pique
till the dark is no more
than a shadow of a shadow.

Like an exorcist, this seductive season has
charmed the pysch-devils out of me.
Spring sweeping and opening
the blinds to light and peace.

Till the only pain I feel is joy
and I know this pen
will not dig up suffering today.

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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "Spring Writes"
by Huni

Oh, huni!!!
Huni, huni...

I am absolutely FLOORED by this! This is wonderful-- beyond wonderful! If I could give this ten 10's, it would still not be enough.
From the title (with it's double meaning) to the final line, this is a terrific write.

Seriously.

I've read many of your beautiful works and been enthralled, but, dear... you've outdone yourself this time!

Brava!

My highest respects, (though still reeling)

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Lilia, Melinda/spring writes
I am blown away by your comments. Thank you both so much!! I really loved writing this, so it means a lot that you enjoyed it. Respect from you Melinda - I'm touched, thanks. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Huni
This has to be my favourite piece by you. It speaks so clearly to every string of emotion. I can't say anymore because I keep re-reading it.

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

Lucie/Alex/writes
Thank you both so much for your kind, kind, words. I'm not sure why it makes me feel so humbled and at the same time so very pleased. It does tho'.
Alex, Collecting and The Things She Loved were my favourites, but I think this one may be mine now too. Thanks.
Lucie, you know how I feel about your talent and your comments. thank you heaps as well. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )

Huni
This is very very good and you astound me with your talent. I envy the wonder you've made here. I know you'll be effective as a prose writer too. Please try that and I promise to read and comment. Regards. Pete

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Peter/thanks
Such a great comment from you. A really big hug and thank you. Prose writer. Not sure what that would mean. I'm still so new to poetry yet. I'll check it out Peter - warm regards, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Huni
I mean you could write short stories or flash fiction because you are becoming better and better in writing longer poetry. I salute you, gypsy! :D

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Seasons
One of the greatest things about this world is its ability to transform you as it moves from season to season, to carry you away with new thoughst and emotions aroused by scent, sound, new patterns of light. You've captured that perfectly. I felt your transformation.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )

Viper thanks
Been without a computer for awhile - so I missed your comment Viper, thanks and for picking up on the way seasons transform us at a deeper level a big hug. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 21, 2004 )

Tina ta and congrats grandma!
I heard your news during a big catch up read. So happy for your little family. I'm getting back slowly to myself and writing and will try to catch up with all the comments and everyones work soon. thanks for stopping by to read this one. And your comments - well just wow and thanks. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: November 30, 2004 )





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