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Never in my life, have I even attempted to write poetry. Recent "issues" have made me think, and I found that writing things down helps to heal.



Someone, something brought you to me
A secret no one knew.
We talked, we touched, we fell in love
Our friendship quickly grew.

What started with a simple kiss,
Became too much to bare.
For when our spouses needed us most,
Neither one of us was there.

The lies and the sneaking,
Doing much more than speaking.
They suspected the whole time.
Still they let us go to be together,
This was no victimless crime.

We wanted so much to be together,
We never truly thought.
How much it would hurt our partners,
Were the vows we took for naught?

We hurt the ones we love the most.
Why, We may never know.
I Love You oh, so very much.
It hurts to let you go.

We are both back with our partners now.
Both trying to do the right thing.
It will take some time, and much hard work
To sooth the nasty sting.

You were there for me, and I for you.
When our relationships were far from perfect,
We both now want to right our wrongs.
Our marriages we try to resurrect.

A special place in my heart,
For you there will always be.
What happens next, we cannot know
We both know now its time to go.

Someone, something sent you to me.
What would happen next we could not foresee.
I will always care so much for you.
My Love as Always! Me







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I by no means consider myself a writer, I just play one on the internet.


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The following comments are for "Someone"
by Snapshot

Snapshot
Jim, if this is your story, then the honesty is stunning. It is full of feeling and meaning. For a first poem it has pretty good form and structure to. Don't stop tho,' the rest will come if this is an example of your latent talent. warm regards and welcome to Lit.org. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Not bad
Not bad as a first effort, Snapshot. As far as critque, it rambles a bit and could use some tightening up. But not bad at all.

As far as the content goes, if this is a true depiction of your life, no judgment from me. Just once I'd like to see some true courage-leave your spouse first and then have all the sex you want.
Again, if this is true, good luck healing the wounds. Just know that no matter what she says she will never trust you fully again.

( Posted by: Staggerlee [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Thank You
huni,Staggerlee
Thanks for the encouragement.At my wifes suggestion, I started to write things down to help sort things out.Unfortunately every word is true, and fortunately my wife is the most incredible human being in the face of the earth.We are only human, if we weren't we certainly would be here.Staggerlee, Thanks for not passing judgement. Suggestions on "tightening this up " would be greatly appreciated.
Jim

( Posted by: snapshot [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

*******
Writing is incredible, it soothes, it heals, and in the long run it forgives. This is a testimony of infidelity that many should read before thinking about it, thanks for sharing and may all be well within your marriage....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Claire/Bob
Clairesbest/Bob,
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Yes, Bob writing does soothe, and hopefully it will help us heal.

Claire,I also hope to continue the journey.Thanks for the kind words.

( Posted by: snapshot [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

snapshot
Wow...talk of honesty. That is a wonderful character to build. I always believe in being as honest as possible in writing. Even if I do place myself in as another character, the things I write I DO feel.......
I am glad to welcome you to Lit. I hope to be seeing lots of your writing. As Claire so nicely put it, "your writing journey". Keep submitting..there is more room OUT then IN!!!

Megwetch,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Someone
Snapshot, your honesty is amazing. I know this must be a very hard time for you. I wish only good things come your way. May you see it through friend. Keep writing. It is good for us all.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Thank You both....
Darlene,
My theory is if I am thinking it I am going to say it. Everyone around me knows that.Not necessarily a good thing ALL the time, however under these circumstances 100% honesty is the only way.

Nae, Thank you for your kind words. Yes it is a difficult time. thank you for your well wishes. Writing seems to keep me just a little bit sane ;). I'm sure I will be submitting more work soon.

( Posted by: snapshot [Member] On: September 14, 2004 )





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