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Warmth soothing
Bath filling
Bubbles foaming
Perfume pouring
Nerves relaxing
Legs stretching
Body sinking
Stress leaving
Soap floating
Candles glowing
Steam rising
Wind blowing
Noise hearing?
Fear creeping
Imagination running
Sound leaving
Confidence returning
Eyes closing
Breath slowing
Mind drifting
Life easing
Water calming
Sleep approaching

Bolt awakening!

Stranger invading
Anger raging
Hands Grasping
Fingers Gripping
Terror exploding
Head submersing
Breath Gasping
Water choking
Legs flailing
Arms struggling
Air failing
Hands restraining
Muscles weakening
Heart slowing
Thoughts wondering
Questions asking
Brain dieing
Life expiring
Bubbles clearing
Face appearing

Husband smiling

It wasn't my fault...I fell asleep and missed my stop.

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The following comments are for "Husband Smiling"
by Jeff

Jeff, I can truly say that this peice will remain with me for awhile. I like the whole two words thing, it managed to be very descriptive but at the same time direct and to the point. Great work.

( Posted by: Wes [Member] On: April 9, 2002 )

Back with a splash
Good to have you back Jeff. I assume the move went well. But onto the poem. This thing rocks, Jeff. I like the rythym and it's flow. It's freaking haunting.

Good job and don't be afraid to post more,


( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: April 9, 2002 )

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