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I've resorted to espionage.
I gather intelligence on what makes you happy,
Turn it into my game plan,
and pursue you with all that I am.

I've embraced piracy,
stealing moments of treasure sized dreams,
making you my prey,
and moving towards you,
like a vessel rides the wind.

I'm shamelessly your stalker,
sneaking peeks of you,
promoting desires which
I will not refrain from,
till you're captured and held as my prisoner.

I've relented to being your lover,
pleasing you with every last stretch of my body,
making you crave me with a ravenous appetite,
leaving you powerless and begging for more.

I am truly shameless...

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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Shameless"
by nae411

Shameless
This is great! I like the reference to espionage, best. Love feels that way, at times, you've captured this aspect very well. Thank you.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Nae,,,,great!
Is this the poem you meant in your email to me? This is wonderful Nae. At times our minds seem to fail us, but subconciously I believe we are absorbing and storing...then it finds its way out....

I really like this Nae!!

My Best to you
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

...
Nae, now this is shamelessly flawless, lol, - huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Nice Nae
Nae, this is the first I've read of your work and I liked this very much. I guess I'm a bit of a harsh judge, therefore the "8." I'm looking forward to checking out more of your poems. But I liked this, especially the opening lines of each stanza, and the last line.

( Posted by: Staggerlee [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

You Are Truly...
Fantastic... What more could your lover ask for...

You sound very devoted to him and he should certainly appreciate that sincerity and drive you have...

I liked this write Very much...

Almost a 10 (only cause I don't got no mony LOL) on the JasoN scale... but on my scale...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Temptress?
Nae,

I see you've taken the next move, I do not understand your use of the word 'relented' in the last stanza though. Is this irony? It looks like you'd chew em up and spit em out to me!

Can we have your old avatar back please?

Love your work Nae,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Shameless thanks/Ivor
Thank you so much for your comments. This was a lot of fun to write. I appreciate you reading.

Ivor, Temptress, huh? I am going to change my name to that... Relented, I thought was a good word, it is irony being that becoming his lover was the plan all along. Old avatar??? You don't like this one? I was called a floating head continuosly on the writing forums that is why I changed it. There is only so much I can do, it is my face you know. Maybe I should post a picture of Marilyn Monroe? Would that be better? LOL

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Floating Head?
Nae,

I was paying tribute to your old avatar, why should I not like your new one?

I show my own face, simply because I have no illusions as to being anybody else, I know more about you from your writings than I do about Marilyn Munro and much prefer to see the face behind the soul.

Thank you

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Ivor
Ivor,

Thank you, don't believe everything you read though, I am actually a sweet person, LOL, I think. Ok I will not use Marilyn, and I will stop drawing a cartoon character, phew, my drawing stinks! Yes, Floating Head! They said I had no neck and that I was actually just a sitting head on a table! How about that???

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Shameless
MMMMMM...is there any other way to be? What a nice read Nae. I like your other avatar and I like this one too. I change mine around because I get bored with one after a while. You are beautiful inside and out and are a gifted writer.

Thanks,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: September 16, 2004 )

Shameless...
sneaking peeks.....
making you my prey....
Guess I'm gonna have to start stalk'n you because I sure like what I have read so far....
Very good work!
Doc

( Posted by: Doc [Member] On: September 17, 2004 )





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