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I heard your voice
in the other room
opening like rainclouds,
the same soft sound
that has haunted me all day.

Your face is at the window, temple
pressed along the line of ancient trees
where light dies;
there are silences in your heart,
volumes in fingers curled tightly
against bloodless palms.

Tell me
the rain will clear,
that darkness is not stone--
that sorrow will not write final words.

Tell me

and I will try not to think of lies...


"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "November's Rain"
by Serenem

wow Melinda..
You have a very beautiful mind. It is a gift to be able to weave words as you do and share with us, how lucky we are. TO have the ability to pull a bit of our thoughts into your work as you do, is true art. My favorite line "that sorrow will not write final words".


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

I am so humbled by your praise and happy that you like this. I'm not so sure I'm worthy... this poem took over a year and a half to write. I started it right after my daughter's suicide attempt. I was so filled with terror. I put this aside, unable to even express how I felt. I was unable write a thing for another ten months.

I was finally able to let this poem see the light of day a couple of weeks ago after I came across it in my files. I was finally able to dust it off a bit and let it 'speak'.

~soft smile~

My daughter is doing wonderfully now, I'm thrilled to say! I am so proud of her!

Thank you, for the encouragement in your reply, Darlene-- it means so much to me.


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

wow, serenem
What a time you have had. In living, growing, loving, and parenting. I'm glad you gave this perspective. I agree with Dareva, you have a beautiful mind, and you are an excellent wordsmith. I'm very fortunate to be able to read you, and heartfully glad that your daughter is well.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

shades of high coos
I am left with a pleasant haiku-like aftertaste to this piece.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

I agree you have a beautiful mind.

This is a moment so hard to capture, but you did it.

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

November's Rain
Hello, everyone!

You've no idea just how much you words mean to me. What a wonderful group of giving people you are...

~soft smile~

mzjen, thank you for your kindness and good wishes. You are so gracious.

lilia, (I love that name!) Thank you! I appreciate your reading this and your comment!

Tef, how do you always manage to me me smile with your responses? You do, you do... *LOL*

londongrey, you are such a kind and supportive person and I always look forward to reading everything you write.

Thank you all.

My warmest regards,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Sweet music to my ears Serenem; This is great! I love to read poems like this, and all at the same time hear it as if you are reciting it right in front of me... Great write!


( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

ah serenum how sweet and gifted you are
your words flowed so masterfully like the water off of a window during just such a november rain.....I am glad to hear that your daughter is doing so well.
I also wanted to thank you for your kind comments regarding my cinquain.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

that darkness is not stone--
that sorrow will not write final words

I found these 2 lines so provocative, it stirred something inside of me while reading. An awesome correlation, thank you....Bob:)

( Posted by: poetryman [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

Ive read a lot of poetry the past few months, Melinda. I've read some really good ones in that time. This one though, this one, is perfect. In every way. I could tell you that all the poetic devices you used were perfect, but you must know that already. I could tell you the imagery was otherworldly, but justice to the work would be cheapened by that description alone. I do not know the words to use to tell you how good this really is. There is no way to rate it except by God who must have inspired it.I am thrilled you have shared and am honored to have read it,

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

November Rain

Again, I have so much gratefulness for all these kind comments on this poem... it's almost more than I can bear...

~soft laughter~

But, I love it!

Musical Jeannie, thank you... I'm so happy that this sat well with you.

CJ, even your response to this is poetic! I loved that image. *LOL* As for your cinquain the praise is well deserved-- you've done a wonderful thing with them!

Bob, thank you for taking the time to read this (and I'm glad to have 'met' you) I am touched that those words in particular stirred something in you... that image was the basis of this one.

Thank you, all.


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )



What could I possibly say after this? How can I tell you how much what you've written here means to me? What more praise could a person who only hopes to be a 'poet' someday ask for?


You made me cry...

thank you.


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

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