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The Weight

I’m heavier than she is
in more ways than one – my eyes
for instance, glide more
deliberately, my tongue
has a certain way of only
leaning out slyly, on occasion
where her’s struts out at any
strain or dare

It’s a weight I carry
on panther’s prideful paws
with pearly patience peering
round corners, taking stock
Her pixie moxie pirrouhettes
on any ready breeze…
her tricky whims traverse distance
with mocking, giddy ease

My landscapes, too, are weightier
with oiled, leaden clouds
in fateful grace a’pondering
where her pastorals are endowed
with lemon zest light, the tarragon
of clover green a’swaying
and silver glints of decadance
from wistful shocks of lucid pain

The wind sings giddy songs to you
of all the roses with which to woo
the springtime dalliance of a
virginal slippet…
Yet where her clipper ships dip
in evidence of forthcomings, yet
my eyes brood in wisened views
matron-heavy, strong and wet


------
"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"


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The following comments are for "The Weight"
by hazelfaern

Hazel
This is brilliantly written. I love when I read a poem and it flows without a snag...wonderfully written.....

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 7, 2004 )

Great!!
I have missed reading your work. What a great piece. I love the alliteration in the second and third lines of stanza two. Wonderful imagery as always!! So nice to get to read your stuff again.

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: September 7, 2004 )

tributatious!
Ha, of course I hear in this a wonderful little tribute to those of us who think more deliberately. Heh, maybe it's not as vexing as they'd have us believe?

Very pretty indeed.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 7, 2004 )

typical
hazel~

As usual you have managed to convey a depth of information, sentiment and emotion all in eloquent beautiful imagery. Not that it's any suprise to any of your loyal readers... You just keep blowing us away. Congrats on winning the poetry contest, and welcome back.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: September 7, 2004 )

Lovely to be missed
Thank you all for such warm, wonderful words. I've missed every one of you, too.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

Hazel
This is a lovely poem. I also like the part about the 'lucid pain'. I felt giddy reading this. Thank you for this one!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

Wow!
Hazelfern;
Welcome back..I've missed your writings...You are sooooooooooooo good at this....and a poet's significance for sure....love your work...

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )





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