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Disclaimer:
If you are easily offended by eroticism in even it's mildest form, please do not read any further... This is not pornographic, but merely graphic in it's meaning...




This metaphor laden love will proclaim
The coupling love like blazing red flame
Applying heat like a white hot poker
Blazing their flesh like furnace's stoker

As one they blend in a deluge of heat
Their sweat it mingles absorbed in the sheet
Branded by love they consume intentions
Neither considers any abstentions

As one their union engulfs them this night
Pleasures abound each thoroughly tonight
With reckless abandon each feels release
Her own explosion still has not ceased

While quivering lightly she feels him near
Lightly caressing her neck and her ear
Heat from his body still warm to the touch
Enforces feeling to him she must clutch

Together they shared their oneness this night
With flames low flickering embers now bright
They lay together in arms that are clenched
Relishing remnants of love that's been quenched

~~~~~

This is the next in a series. The first was "A Fire Begins"

------
Daniel Lloyd Kennedy


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The following comments are for "Blazing, Licking, Roaring Flames..."
by daprdan

A theme happening here?
Has anyone else noticed a symbiosis going on here at Lit? It's not the first time that a lot of poems come on with similar subjects. Lovely sensual one this time. Hope Nae caught the vibes.
This one Dan, can sit proudly with the others, very, very nice. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Hot & Sweaty
This is really pretty good. I balked at the use of "night" three times however and abstentions seemed forced in there. For the most part it's good and hot and makes me think of similar couplings in my life. Now I have to go back and find the first of this series. Keep it up!

( Posted by: Staggerlee [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Now you're talkig
Dan,

I read your first poem in this series and thought , yes ok. (at least I'm honest). As you know I don't often comment on love poetry.

But now you are talking my friend! This one is full of excitement, feeling and passion. Keep writing like this and my computer screen will start to steam up!

Excellent rythm and rhyme as we have come to expect from you. And your ability to handle different subjects is amazing, especally this one. I take it in this case you definately know where the muse came from!

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Dan Big Bro
This is a celebration! Never pornographic,I agree, and very very artistic! How about joining a write-off with sensuality as the theme, and Claire your opponent? LOL!

I like this and its predecessor, A Fire Begins.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Brothers?
I've now seen this mentioned a few times and would love to know, are you really brothers?

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

On Brothers...
I'll let Peter explain...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

@Huni
I think what you are witnessing here is the arrival of a new type of man. The sensitive man :-).

But we need reinforcement and analysis from women.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Well, for my nickel's worth
This poem is sensitive, evocative, and well written. It's touching to see such sensitivity written from your pen, Dan. But then, you are tender-hearted; as male poets tend to be. Thanks for a warm read.

Char :)

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Ahem.....
I better not comment, as this type of conversation should not happen between a SGT and his PRIVATES.

LOL!!!

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

How About...
A SGT and Her privates then? LOL... How are you holding up Alex?... Hanging in there?... I'm still pulling for ya... You can do this, you are very strong...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Blazing Flames
My kind of poetry Dan! Wonderfully written. I have to go and read the other one now.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

daprdans encounter
good write.

( Posted by: DieBaronHobskewward [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )





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