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I know not what is happening to me?
Iím retreating with increased velocity.
My heart still and always beats with love for you.
Yet we still continue disagreeing on identical issues.
I ache for your understanding and your touch
As I hope you still ache for me just as much?
I know and respect your stance on what you feel
Why is it when I try to explain we cannot yield?
You want me to talk, not show a tone, and share with you
Saying you feel left out, and thatís not what I mean to do
I can communicate with my friends who also write
Yet when it comes to us I shutdown and instill blight
Is it new meds, increased depression or anxiety?
I seem to improve and then find again itís not me.
I believe what you say about how I can hurt and act.
I trust that you are helping to get the other me back.
Fall is my favorite season yet Iím feeling puzzled and sad.
Just days away from another birthday and still Iím not glad.
Knowing youíre confused as to why I donít and where weíre going.
I feel the very same way and want our Ďweí to continue growing
Understanding your hurt, carefully choosing my words I again apologize
While discussing, my Ďtude returns leading again to not seeing eye to eye
I donít understand how after months of reaching out I got this way.
I want only for us both to grab hold and make this strife go away.



------
CJ Herlihy


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The following comments are for "Retreat"
by CJHerlihy

Carol's Retreat
A note for the form of this poem...it is just a bit wordy. I think you could tighten it up some, but it is so full of emotion that I am thinking you may have needed to write it just as it is.
I enjoy reading all your work Carol.
This is so sad, especially about helping "get the other me back". Isn't it helpful to write?

Never let hope diminish. The most important thing is the love you share with your cherished womyn. Words are wonderful. But actions do speak volumes in themselves. Never lose the romance.

My Best to you
Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: September 5, 2004 )

Retreat
I enjoyed reading this piece of you. The subject hits close to home. I agree that if you wrote it free verse you'd have more freedom to let it all hang out. You are a very good writer. And a big Happy Birthday to you my friend!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

awww shucks ladies...
lilia....thanks so much for your kind comments and glad u enjoyed the sony corp quote...have u seen the pic that goes with it?
picture this....a cat (tabby) sitting inside a vivid red bird cage staring out at an even vivider yellow canary sitting on its perch and looking beyond the locked cage door at the cat.

i'm blushing...perfectly timed nae...as today is the day....9/9 the virgo, tried and true...the virgin NOT!!! LMAO

( Posted by: cjherlihy [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )





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