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Slip away

Feeling it slip away,
Wonder is it such a bad thing,
Let it go, watch it fly,
My all heads out towards the ether,
And Iím left wondering if it really matters,
Iím going slowly and I feel it,
Feeling it slip away,
Keep my head down as I walk the street,
The silent songs within my head,
The voice that sounds like mine,
A constant commentary on my life,
A litany in the third person,
Feeling it slip away,
The emotion welling up inside,
The release it wants,
My own private catharsis,
My own private hell,
Feeling it slip away,
Order without chaos,
Worse than chaos without order,
And where is the harmony to follow my disorder,
Not life without purpose,
Just life without,
Just feeling it slip away,


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Abs.

Me!? Weird!? Never!!


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The following comments are for "Slip Away"
by Abbie

delerium
One word comes to mind: 'delerium' (sp?... its monday gimme a break)

A piece that I am sure will remind all readers of the times when depression was/is a close personal friend, from which at the time, all things begin, end and spin around.

Well written piece, i can feel it 'slipping away' as you write. Well done.

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: April 8, 2002 )

Ether
Very good wording. You truly presented the feeling.

-Kine

( Posted by: Kine [Member] On: April 18, 2002 )

badd
this was posted on my b-day so i decided to check it out kick ass

( Posted by: DEMONeyesBLUE [Member] On: January 9, 2004 )





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