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Random lights in the darkness, fight
The desire to count them all individually
Each light represents a different world
A tiny sparkle in the distance
From everyone else, a shell

Light is life, tangible
Representation of the progression obtained
Where there is light there is, life
Ends with the flip of a switch
Intangible.

------
Le Mot Juste



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The following comments are for "Watching the skyline"
by Kaiden

intangible/Kaiden
There is something I can't quite pin down here. Almost all your sentences can be split a number of way's and have a new sense. If that was what you intended then congrat's. I liked the line 'life ends with a flip of the switch', as if light is interchangeable with life. I notice that you managed to avoid all the obvious cliché's on light. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Yes
That is precisely what I was aiming for. :)

Thank you for your praise.

( Posted by: kaiden [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )

Claire
Thank you very much, I will work on my line breaks for the next one.

( Posted by: Kaiden [Member] On: September 6, 2004 )





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