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I've tried this before
I just can't get it right
all I want to say is
I made a mistake
now I'm trying to make things right
I'm willing to try anything
to speak with you for a night
if you don't want me
it's something I understand
what I did should never had happened
I wanted everything to be perfect
My expectations were too high
my standards were too low
I wanted you
I know that now
I made my mistake
not knowing how
how you felt
you could have told me
maybe things would have changed
if only you had showed me
now you won't speak to me
life is so fucked up
and all I want is one last chance
to fix what I screwed up

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~~~dream as if you'll live forever...live as if you'll die today~~~


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The following comments are for "One Last Chance"
by twistymisty

Last Chance
Not quite my taste in writing. Too human. Regardless, it was well-written. Pretty good overall.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: September 3, 2004 )

hey
hi misty i dont know if you check this too often but if you do...i've been reading your stuff latly just to kill time.....it's really good....i wrote some new stuff so check it out
kathleen
littleone

( Posted by: littleone [Member] On: November 15, 2004 )

On the line
You writing leaves no room for wasted emotion. Raw and powerful...and easy to relate to and say, ya I remember feeling that way and it sux!

( Posted by: Indianna [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )





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