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Sometimes I wonder to myself, is life supposed to be so tough?
Iím sure this tormentís not good for my health,
Itís time to say enough is enough.

You promise me youíll stop the pain,
But with each new sorry,
It starts all over again.

I want to feel needed,
I want to feel loved,
I donít want to leave you for Gods above

I know it would be selfish to take my life away,
But are you gonna change and make me want to stay?


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You laugh because i'm different, I laugh because you're all the same.


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The following comments are for "Will you stop this pain?"
by BabyPink

Bob, you...
...took the words out of my mouth before I could write them down...Stephanie, my dear, you really captured the essence of teenage anonymity, and the difficulty we've all faced in our own lives. Very nicely written. I hope things get better, soon, for you.

Namaste,
William

( Posted by: the Co.konspirator [Member] On: August 28, 2004 )

Stephanie,
...yes, this does have a sweet sadness to it, but a lot of truth as well. I have often seen the "each new sorry' result in no changes, you seem to have the wisdom to see through them. I hope so, love huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 29, 2004 )

hand in my heart
This is so fine, so sorrowful that I hesitate to criticise any part of it. It's the best writing I've seen from you so far. Only things I would change is to take out 'to myself' in the first line to help its flow and in the 3rd verse swap around 'I want to feel loved' with 'I want to be needed' to keep the rhyming pattern consistent. This is such a cry from the soul that I feel guilty saying that any part of it isn't perfect.
Take care of yourself,
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: August 29, 2004 )

it's ok really...
Hey, This poem was written about my first heartache.... The guy that I'm with now is wonderful and we have been together for just over a year. So no need to worry as I'm not in pain any more......only when I get hormonal and shout and cause arguments hehehe!!!
Thank - you all for your kind comments and helpful advice....I really do appreciate it.
Ciao x

( Posted by: BabyPink [Member] On: August 29, 2004 )





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