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endless she,
who filled
this empty laugh
with crimson sensation while
now me,
all from cried lips found pressed
through her soul deep,
yet darkened again to we.

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The following comments are for "again"
by etienne

not too shabby etienne
Please post some more. I liked the depth of meaning in this, mixed with a the slight opaqueness.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 29, 2004 )

I fell for this one. You paint, brushing new strokes over old ones, creating fresh pictures the entire way through the poem. Intriguing and beautiful in my eyes.

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: August 30, 2004 )

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