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quiet with dreams
wearing the soft mouth of sleep


"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "Beloved"
by Serenem

Hemingway Utterly Poetic
That's how I see haiku now, looking at this Beloved.

I might be joining the ranks of haiku/neohaiku writers. I've been Penelope's student on the writingforums. Feels like I'm getting the feel for the threads of thought.

( Posted by: teflon [Member] On: September 7, 2004 )

Tef and 'ku
Thanks, Tef, for reading this and commenting! I'm so thrilled that you are seriously getting interested in writing haiku! It is such a wonderful, thought provoking form.

My warmest regards,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: September 8, 2004 )

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