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The hallways tremble with pictures of laughter
Spinning out visions of sloppy ever after
I needed rockets, you needed space
You see the world where I see your face
Fade away
Fade away
An oxygen, vapor, and nothing bouquet
You fade away

I hear forever is just superstition
Only lasting so long as neverís in remission
And I have to say that I knew all along
If ever Iíve wanted to be proven wrong
Itís a dream
Itís a dream
Twisted in chains of masked prophecy
Ever sustaining our propriety
Itís a dream

Like a wind only whispers when itís tired of shouting
Iíll trade you a kiss for this life that youíre touting
Call it anti-pragmatic or melodramatic
I send out the signals, but only get static
Here I am
Here I am
Iíll be waiting right here
Here I am
Here I am
Where are you?

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The following comments are for "Static"
by Spider

"never's in remission" that is cool

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

Wow, Spider
This is a well written piece of work.

Banzai!!! to you, and may you write as long!!


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

spider static
Excellent, spider, lots of great expressions,
'an oxygen, vapour and nothing bouquet
You fade away.'

just inspired, well done, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

This is the second love
poem I've read today and they are miles apart in style. This was magnificent. Fully formed thoughts with an elegant walk; intriguing phrases, lending new perspectives to oft-viewed scenes. Congratulations on a fantastic piece.

( Posted by: cyn [Member] On: November 4, 2004 )

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