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Meandering lines
Multi-coloured metro map
Mysterious maze


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Spudley Strikes Again
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The following comments are for "The Tube"
by Spudley

The Tube
You know, I have a feeling that anyone unfamiliar with British slang might think the title of this haiku odd. I, however, rather enjoyed it. It didn't really seem to have too much of a 'deeper meaning,' rather, it was just a fun little snippet of a day in the life, you know? Good times...

William

( Posted by: the Co.konspirator [Member] On: August 25, 2004 )

Maze
Spud;
I like this alot...A maze can be so unpredictable, it's so confusing sometimes...I loved the way you maped this Haiku out...Thanks for a great read...

Sorry! I have been busy these last few days, doing "His Work" for Him...

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 25, 2004 )

Mind the gap
Great work!! I am always intrigued by the different subway/underground maps. Thanks for sharing.

By the way, I have always loved the word meandering. Great use of it.

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: August 25, 2004 )

spudley
This is terrific 'cityku', I love it!
I had no trouble understanding the title at all...

~smile~

Excelent work.

Regards,

Serenem

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 25, 2004 )

wow
Wow. Who would have thought that 8 words could generate so many replies! :-) (and every one of them was so much longer than the original poem, too!)

Thank you all so much for taking the time to comment.

I like the London Underground. Pen is right; it is a marvel, and it really is the best way to get around the city.

I still think of it as a maze, though - travelling underground I lose my sense of direction very easily, and the non-geographic design of the map makes that even easier. (there's a classic game to play on first-time visitors: a race from Mansion House station to St Paul's station. The visitor will look at the map, jump on the circle line, change to the central line, and get to St Paul's... only to find his friend waiting for him already. How? They look a long way apart on the map, but they two stations are actually only a few of hundred meters apart)

And mysterious! Hehe. Don't you just love some of those station names? They're so evocative.
And, if you know where to look, there's a whole load of abandoned tunnels and stations to find out about.

I have a mouse mat with a map of the tube on it. Sadly, I can't use it, because the lines make the mouse pointer jump erratically when I use my optical mouse, but I still keep it on my desk anyway. :)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

Viv Le Stinkhole!!!!
I'm sorry to say I am not that fond of the tube, in fact I find it quite depressing. I have used it all my life and thanks to the past two summers I now never want to see it again. Well over 100C I nearly died a few times last summer!!!

And then there are the tourists AAAAAHHHHHH!!!!

Despite all the years though, I still find the map confusing sometimes, I just stare at it and nothing goes in.

Great original Haiku!!!!

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 27, 2004 )

Thanks
This made me smile. Odd.

( Posted by: SoulShade [Member] On: September 18, 2004 )

Spud
I like maps and love staring at them for hours. This is just sooo good! Yes, cityku is this.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: September 18, 2004 )

subway haikus
Subways have so much ideas and aspects to them that a whole subset genre of haiku can be written on: the maps, the tunnel-cave aspect, the claustrophobia,the mystery, the creatures, the techno, the escape, etc etc.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 2, 2004 )





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