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Author's Note:
This is a twenty-four piece collection of my attempts at haiku, over a period of roughly twenty-four days, coincidentally. Some of these were submitted to the Lit.Org Poetry Contest, though I'm not sure if I submitted them on time. :) They're in order from oldest to newest; I tried following traditional rules more strictly as I progressed, so I guess the first few are probably more similar to senryu than haiku, if anything.


Still car, beating heart;
racing mind is weary now:
euphoric sunset!

-

Time passes slowly,
childhood is over quickly:
relativity.

-

A cool sunrise, and
salvation rests quietly;
the light bathes her face.

-

The seed is sown, and
the flower blossoms swiftly:
watchful hummingbird.

-

The fragrance of dew;
she imagines the texture:
goose pimples abound.

-

The cautious rabbit
caught in the ancient moonlight;
disappears like mist!

-

A gentle breeze, and
three squirrels play at the base
of a great maple.

-

Songs of early birds;
the rabbits roam quietly:
brisk wind in my face.

-

Snuffling brown nose;
white, cream fur against the breeze:
the chow-chow explores!

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Warm, angry downpour;
maples bend submissively:
the wind on green grass!

-

Blurred concrete and glass;
low, desaturated skies:
the storm's arrival.

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A maple leaf falls;
happy chow-chow notices:
the forest city.

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Dark clouds rolling out;
glowing orange horizon:
night falls upon us.

-

An emerald lawn;
blurred wings of a tiny bird:
the storm is over.

-

Fragments of moonlight;
a cottontail is spotted:
the chow-chow gives chase!

-

A lamplit sidewalk;
cadence through rippled puddles:
the skunk's legacy.

-

Torrid afternoon;
a cold bird fades on concrete:
shelter of maples.

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A fallen nestling;
concrete stained by another:
spreads its wings in vain.

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Crisp midsummer night;
the cottontails snuggled down:
maples are quiet.

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A cool morning breeze;
clear cerulean expanse:
sunlit maple's buds.

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Emerald landscape;
garden snails after the rain:
orchid evening sky.

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Late golden sunset;
falls upon bright grassy knoll:
urban woodlet view.

-

Slate gray horizon;
gauzy tangerine sunset:
pastel heavens blush.

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Warm, soft midnight breeze;
ancient gibbous moon aglow:
a dark cloud rolls past.




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The following comments are for "24"
by verve

24 Haiku!!!
This is haiku heaven! LOL.

There are too many here to possibly bring out favourites, your observations and persepctive though I really liked.

This is such an achievement on differing subjects in a three line stanza. I gave it a ten.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 22, 2004 )

Limbo
Hi, Jessica. ;)

I don't know if I would say I'm back or not. :) I can't seem to write like I used to, either; or maybe I just don't want to.

I have *something* churning in me; lately I feel like I'm watching an egg, wondering what's going to come out. I've been toying with the idea of venturing into writing stories, and have a bunch of ideas rolling around, some that I've discussed with Rogan. But I've never been very good with stories, so I'm hesitant and procrastinating; I'm also lazy. :P

Thanks for the kind comment, both of you. Appreciated. :)

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )

24
Plenty of food for thought here. I like the way the word 'ancient' sounds in your haiku. 'low desaturated sky' is really good too.

You like chow-chows, then?

Keep 'em coming, verve...

( Posted by: sahelsteve [Member] On: August 24, 2004 )





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