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Author's Note:
I inserted some pictures of the subject at the bottom. Enjoy.


Gentle dark eyes peer beneath brow,
leathery brown nose inquisitively twitching;
a long yawn escapes from lolling bilberry tongue,
mouth spread wide in toothy smile.

A light breeze through vanilla fur,
whimsically tickling soft, creamy ears;
sleepily rolls onto a comfortable side,
squinting against the light.

Peacefully sighs, eyes shut tight:
chow-chow dreaming in the sunset.






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The following comments are for "Simba, or The Lion Sleeps Tonight"
by verve

Simba!
I had the nickname Simba for a while. (I probably would have kept it if Disney hadn't spoilt it by releasing The Lion King; it was pretty unique back then) (I won't explain how I got it either - maybe another time)

So yes. With that title staring at me from the front page, I had to come and read this poem. Oh, that, and the fact that it was written by Verve, who has penned some of the finest poetry this site has to offer. How could I refuse?

And this is another goodie. I've already got one or two of yours in my favorites list, but this one may well follow. You've made the poem feel almost as soft as the fur in those photos. A great acheivment. A wonderful dreamy, lazy poem.

Best line: "bilberry tongue". Perfect.

Thank you :)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

Spudley
Wow. I don't know what to say, heh. That's quite possibly the nicest comment anyone's ever given me.

You're gonna give me a big head. :P

Thank you.

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )





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