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we celebrate the ruination of our purity with smiles carved into our faces

with the needles still in our veins

yet we can never replace what we have lost

so ends another day

when will we realize that only we are to blame for our imperfections?

When shall we ever realize that we only hurt ourselves?

If we could see beyond the small pains and sufferings in our own little worlds, we could make the world a better place

and if you hear these words, will I look up to see a vacant stare gazing back at me?

You always want me to show you who I am but soon after I do I become someone else

the black hole from which I was spat is the only lonely home I know

and I feel fine as I descend into darkness, drifting through the space betwixt the nameless stars


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The following comments are for "“Black Hole”"
by viewsocruel

Black Hole
Hey, I feel your poem "Black Hole" is a really deep poem that touched me and made me think of myself, the line "You always want me to show you who i am, But soon after i do, i become someone else" reminds me of myself in relationships, and maybe because of that poem i may try to stop turning into the person i don't want to be.
Thanks for such a meaningful poem.
Ciao x

( Posted by: BabyPink [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

black hole
Are you a Gemini, by chance? I really like this one. It seems a bit different than many of your others, yet still dark. There seems to be some sort of acknowledgement here. I like your line-spacing also, it is much, much easier to read. Thank you. I think you're writing is improving, I really, really feel this piece.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: August 22, 2004 )

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