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I am scared.
Every direction I look all I see are strangers.
They are smiling at me, trying to comfort me in my time of pain.
They tell me to relax, that everything will be ok.
They are liars.
As their cold hands poke and prod at me I notice him.
He takes the chair next to me and grabs my arm.
I know what comes next.
My eyes tear up as he reaches for it.
I turn my head and that's when I feel it.
The needle hurts and my arm starts to burn as he injects the awful drug.
That's when I realize that this man, these strangers and that awful needle were sent here to me.
They were sent from Hell by Satan himself!
Damn, I hate the Dentist.

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by Prissy

Practice, Practice, Practice
Hm... Don't know what to say... except this is not really a poem. You shouldn't just try to explain a situation, rather you should expand it, bend it, squeeze it, make it explode until something new is born. Just a suggestion...

( Posted by: Paradox [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

Oh, boy, Prissy, I'm with you on this one! I feel every line and every sentiment, and I think you did well with your experience. I laughed when I read the last line, reread it a couple of times, and nodded my head in agreement to an empty room. It's poetry to me, free-verse is the name, I think.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

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