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You cast doubt upon my soul
With your indifference.
My confidence dwindles to a point,
Then gone.
I dread the look you send my way,
It cuts.
I wipe the tear and sigh.
Your voice echoes in my mind
Those fateful words you spoke
And leave me breathless with despair
"I don't love you any more."
A cry escapes and I wither.

Your footsteps tread
Their way Across the floor
Their tattoo scar my broken heart
The pieces of my fantasy
Like scattered dust,

"See the man with the lonely eyes, oh, take his hand, you'll be surprised." Supertramp.

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The following comments are for "Like Dust"
by nauticus66

Like Dust

What a burden this poem places on the heart. Makes me teary eyed just at the thought. Very real poetry. Excellent.


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

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