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Leaves run as refugees in altered streets;
A horde of angel lemmings trace the hill
Where light and darkness drum soft ending beats.

On red earth burnt beneath its several heats
And over unploughed cities, green, unstill,
Leaves run as refugees in altered streets.

And where a hedgerow bars their path they meet
To tremble to the wind that hunts them still;
Where light and darkness drum soft ending beats.

As wraiths of rooks they bind day’s winding sheets
Into a silence menacing and shrill;
Leaves run as refugees in altered streets.

Now herded into drifts the year completes
A leopard skin of gold, a magic keel,
Where light and darkness drum soft ending beats.



From Nature, Nature panics and retreats.


On thinning wings of age and broken will


Leaves run as refugees in altered streets


Where light and darkness drum soft ending beats.


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The eyes rule all.


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The following comments are for "Leaves Run"
by pastiche247

Leaves Run
I love the repitition I felt in this. You did a splendid job. I felt like I was walking my street during the Autumn, bringing in the vision of color, and the feeling of crips leaves rolling down the street. Thanks for this, I really like your writing Pastiche.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

A villanelle!!!
I read it twice before I realized, so beautiful. I'm so jealous pastiche. I still can't do one of these. Who are you really? ~smile~
warm regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )

WoW! Peter
I like this villanelle! I envy the perfection you created here! I love this line most: As wraiths of rooks they bind day’s winding sheets,
And of course the lines you chose for the refrains.

Thank you!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )





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