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Away go the flatlands
Quilted in fields of intricate green,
Breast-like with pasture and
Mushroomed with woods
Tilting at old Saxon churches;
Sniffing the salt in the
Cold northern sea,
Sensing invasion

Away from the eye go
The delicate veins, the streams
And the secretive rivers;
With shiver and fur of
Each tiny heartbeat,
Fox and the owl and
Dirty faced swans,
Old names corrupted

Away from the modern
The cottages stand, flowered
And scented, lost in the heart
Of some history beating;
Pretending with cricket
And afternoon tea,
Saluting the oak
With the faintest of smiles


------
The eyes rule all.


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The following comments are for "Essex"
by pastiche247

Poetry(not in rhyme)
Peter,

I loved this piece and it is Essex! People who know me on this site, know it takes a lot to get me to comment on none rhyming poetry. I always try to find out as much as I can about the author and as such, I have had a look at your website.

I am glad I did, I can truly say your work is outstanding, it flows with a rythm that I personally only associate with rhyme. I have not had a chance to read more than a few of your works on your own site, but would beg you to publish more here.

I do not know how long you have been on the site as I only joined earlier this year, but it is the first time I have noticed you work. If you are new to the site a warm and real welcome to you. I look forward to more poems from you.

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

eeeeeekkkk..Essex
I lived in Upminster for years, I went to school there and went to college in Hornchurch, I know I know, but I'm from central London, not an Essex boy! LOL

You described this perfectly. I loved the Essex countryside, my grandad still lives there in a tiny village.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Peter
I agree with Ivor. I loved his rhyming poems and he doesn't give comments on my non-rhyming poems except maybe he thought the rhythm's quite fine. But this one Peter, has a rhythm that's almost like rhyming and I love reading it aloud! I don't know about the place but you somehow brought me there with this excellent piece. I hope you'll post some more and that we could read. ;D

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Pictoral
A lovely little pictoral poem. You've painted a vivid picture of the scene. You've got a great eye for detail there.

Thank you. :-)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Lovely Essex
This is lovely and you do have an eye for detail. I would like to write a fine as this - in fewer words than I do - and still have a poem contain so much. I don't know Essex to look at. Only as an armchair traveller, and yet it felt so real to me. You have a good sense of rhythm in your work it felt musical to read.

Spud said you have a good eye for detail, I see that as well, yet I get a sense you mean more than just the eye can see.
For example this section:

Fox and the owl and
Dirty faced swans,
Old names corrupted

had me thinking of the old signs on the inns "The fox and hound" "Three swans neck" etc. The last being a corruption of "the three nicks" on the swans beaks to denote who owned them. I was so easily able to read this with my eye and my mind. Loved it Peter. warm regards - huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: July 17, 2005 )

Ivor Alex Pastiche et al..
Essex....now wouldn't that be Beckham / Capt.Mark Philips country...

Its so touching to come across such exquisite trilling of pastorales -against the backdrop of the long bachannale -slowly but surely winding down...

Perhaps -one hopes-the day might yet come when us lesser mortals cease to stand - hushed ..expectant...hat in hand...tugging at forelock...outside Western embassies ,for that once in a lifetime chance to get into the promised land.


( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: July 17, 2005 )

Essex Pastoral
Being there now, in many dimensions at once (past & present), in the reading. Beautiful.

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: July 18, 2005 )





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