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She moves her knee sideways,
Rolling the seam of her leg,
Turning the point of her shoe
To a stranger.

She nods to her friend’s conversation;
Safe as the squeak on
An old rocking chair.

The ends of her thoughts,
Falling and rising,
Slip past her knee –
She looks up from the line of her shoe.

The stranger, all eyes, is smiling.


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The eyes rule all.


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The following comments are for "Exposed"
by pastiche247

what a tease!
this piece is very imaginative, and very well worded! i like this a lot!! well done.

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

Enticing Words
Enticing Words...they drag you right along with the vision in your head! Good Job.

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

exposed
Very intriguing! Simply mysterious. Love it.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

Exposed
This is lovely and dangerous! I really like your work.

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )





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