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the shade
of dark birds rest
within your eyes, resigned
my words ache to say I love you
but donít





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MKL

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"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL


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The following comments are for "Failings ~A Cinquain~"
by Serenem

I liked this very much...
I am trying to grasp the concept. I enjoyed this one and your others.
I redid my huntress as a cinquain and would like to ask you to take a gander at it and see what you think about how i did.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

blast melinda
I meant to give you ten, then tried to add one but it didn't work. This is wonderful, explain the form to this dunderhead and I'll try it myself. huni.

I like the shade of dark birds in the eyes.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

Hello, CJ, Huni ~failings
Cj, Thank You very much. I'm enjoying the form. I'm so glad you are trying it! I look for your huntress cinquain. I've been away for a few days, so I missed it...


Huni, Thanks! I am so pleased that you liked it. I'll come back with the explanation of the form, hold on!

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 22, 2004 )

Huni, the cinquain
Huni, here is a brief explanation of the cinquain and a link to a place which describes it more completetly.

The cinquain was created by a woman, around the turn of the last century, (1900) named Adelaide Crapsey. She loved the haiku form and based the cinquain on it, but with an additional twist.

A cinquain is five lines,

L1 - 2 syllables
L2 - 4 syllables
L3 - 6 syllables
L4 - 8 syllables
L5 - 2 syllables



Some more about it and some samples can be found at this link:

shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/cinquain.html



Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 22, 2004 )

Melinda and bob
Thank-you both for taking time and sharing knowledge. I will give this a try. Looks like it could be fun. Can it be any subject or is it specific to say nature like Haiku for example? huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )





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