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the time is right
for letting all my demons go
and stand aside
and watch me ego tear apart what's left
of my pride

heave and sigh -
as long as it's respectfully
I'll feel obliged
for every crumb you're sweet enopugh to leave behind

try to fight?
try to stop the rain from falling
I'm behind
running out of time and going out of style


The following comments are for "heave and sigh"
by shapeshifter

This is a very sensitive piece, and very humble.

Thank you for sharing an insight into you.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

well, you know, what can I say
we all have our feeble moments, don't we?

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

your'e tough
My Dearest Shapeshifter...

You should at least give me some credit for trying a new form in which I've never written...
I hope "battling" doesn't mean you are really enemies. My next rhyme will put you out like the cat.

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

It's fun but it is totally confusing! why did DrK get so upset and quit? I'm too sensitive for this...but it is much more interesting than anything don't seem new to this at all...

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

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