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I am submitted to this dead feeling inside, committed to the loneliness, which is not to be denied.

Suffering to me, is life a way of life and happiness seems so distant, like a dream I cannot recall.

I am suffocated by all the nonsense you place in my head, I’d try to kill myself but I fear I am already dead.

Is this what hell is like? To be alone and incomplete? So out of place in a senseless world?

So boring and dull, this so called reality, so tedious and unrewarding, this weak mortality.

For I have thoughts and feelings so powerful, yet am held down by my own human, physical limitations.

Held down from rising or releasing all of this inside, all the negative energy building up in me.

In the shadow of loneliness I fail to find the strength to shrug off this overwhelming darkness that entangles my soul, and keeps me bound, unable to move, I can only shuffle the thoughts in my head that I pray to leave me at peace within the midst of all this madness.

How is a lunatic to obtain a peace of mind? Is it worth searching so hard for something I may never find?
Am I to help or be helped? Cause nothing seems to work.
Oh, father, where did I go wrong?


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The following comments are for ""negamaniac""
by viewsocruel

Again, like the last piece, this starts off strong with a solid rhyme in the first line but then disintegrates into self indulgent dark rambling, that seems almost pointless.

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

This poem is raw in a good way, and I feel it showed a deep look into who you are. I enjoyed the read.


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Although I found the poem to be dark, I also have written poems dark and questioning both my existence and my purpose in serving God. I think this is a good expression of emotions... It may need polishing up or it could stand on its own. Regardless, there is little call for degeneration in to name calling, it is both unseemingly and unworthy of gentlemen.

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

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