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Say not
that the poet
in us all dies early,
turning downward the eyelid of
our hope...


"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "The Poet ~ A Cinquain~"
by Serenem

Nice and thanks for the info on this new style to me may have to see what I can do with it.

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

Cinquain, cinquain, chapter1

I so happy that you want to try it out! I really like them!

I've actually changed the last word in this, which I think makes it better...

'Say not
that the poet
in us all dies early,
turning downward the eyelid of
our muse...'



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

cinquain, what?
Greetings, all you cat-haiku writers!
I'm still battling my haiku-handicap, and now there is this cinquain. sownthing to do with 100? As in 100 letters?

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

To reply to Teflon:
"Cinq" = French for "five";
Quatrain = Poem with four lines;
Therefore Cinqain = poem with five lines.
(and no... I hadn't heard of it until recently, either ;-))

To comment on the actual poem:
Ooh, yes. Nice one. And I *really* liked the alternative ending you gave there - it gives the whole thing a lively touch. That's great imagery you've got there there - your inner poet is certainly alive and kicking! (now you got me all worried - I hope my inner poet doesn't die! :-o )

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Here a cinq, there a cinq--

Thanks for reading and commenting on this, Teflon and Spudly! (Spudly, thanks for jumping in with an answer to Tef, in my absence!)

I've only become aware of the cinquain a feww days ago, but I really like it.

Here's some information about it.

The cinquain was created by a woman named Adelaide Crapsey, around the turn of the last century. (1900) She loved the haiku form and based the cinquain on it, but with an 'additional' twist.

A cinquain consists of five lines, it used to be iambic, (or accentual) but that is no longer a requirement.

L1 - 2 syllables
L2 - 4 syllables
L3 - 6 syllables
L4 - 8 syllables
L5 - 2 syllables

Some more about it and some samples can be found at this link:

I'm enjoying it quite a lot! I think that you may like this form!



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

I hear the beat
When I read it out loud, I hear it beat in two lines, like this:

Say not that the poet in us all dies EARLY,
turning downward the eyelid of our HOPE...

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

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