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Under the street light
We met in the rain
I was just a young man
Full of disdain.

Under the street light,
You held me so close,
You were just a lonely girl,
With no place to go.

Under the street light,
We kissed away the pain,
We found each otherís souls that night
And disappeared in the rain.

Under the street light,
So long ago,
I thought that I would go insane
If you ever let me go.

But you let me goÖ

You let me go.

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"See the man with the lonely eyes, oh, take his hand, you'll be surprised." Supertramp.


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The following comments are for "Under the street light"
by nauticus66

Under....
I liked this lots nauticus. I found the 3rd line of the 3rd Stanza a bit out of place, being too long. Really minor to me, because you have written a nice piece here, and I did like how you ended it, kind of felt like an echo of the end of a song, "but you let me go, you let me go....."

Thanks for sharing this !!!

Looking forward to reading more of you..Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

nauticus66.......
I always listen to a poem, rather than read it, if that makes sense, I hear the rhythm and words in my own voice I suppose.

This was a nice snapshot, it left me wanting to know more about the story.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Chris
I saw this and loved this in the thread! i am glad you posted this here so I could comment. I like the last lines, they seem to echo with eternal sadness. And the lamppost seemed to be a signpost for this beautiful season in your life... if this was you who spoke here.

Thank you.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Thank you
Thank you guys for the nice comments. I so loved being a part of the light thread and the last thread fantacies and fears I liked as well. Saddly I did not save or post my F n F part and lost it during the down time... so this time I posted as one of my regular poems. Glad you liked it.

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Chris
I have a copy of your part printed on paper, just ask or email Claire not to add her wrap up yet and I'll post maybe in my blog and once you copied it, I could unpublish my blog. How about that? just need your response. Thanks

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

peter
I actually have no copy of my own and I would be in your debt if you would be so kind as to post it here so I can have a copy. Thanks Peter

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

F/F Chris
Check out my new blog, your F/F thread part is already there. ;D

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

Thanks Peter
Thanks Peter, I got my copy... much apreciated :O).

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )





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